A bit confused,,,essay #2

Okay it is very late into the evening but I am here working on my evaluation argument essay#2 and I am completely stuck. I've got all these ideas that I want to put into the essay but am very unsure how to do so because when I read through the entire essay, it doesn't seem to flow right or even follow the essay criteria. I've done outlines and webs to try to sort through my ideas and put it in order but I feel like I'm all over the place. I was satisfied with my first draft, but after class last Monday, I didn't feel like I was doing the essay correctly. I know what my topic is and what I want to point out but I think the system of values' list is throwing me off. I'm not sure if I'm suppose to include all of the criteria that I mentioned in my system of values or just choose out a few and kind of focus on those throughout the essay. I'm just a little unsure of how to incorporate it all into the essay; I sort of have an idea but not a very clear one.

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